Holes:
The light from the sun shines through the gap in my curtain, I get out of bed. Another day of digging holes I say to myself. I get ready and go to the canteen for breakfast. The food smells revolting. I gulp it down trying hard not to puke it up. Making my way towards the shed to get a shovel, I find a lizard sitting on the handle. I don’t want to look like a wimp in front of everyone so I go to grab it.
The lizard sits there staring at me with its huge evil black eyes.
I ally like your opening, it sets the scene well.
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1. Be mindful of varying your sentence openings. you have overused I to start your sentences.
Hello, thank you for your 100WC entry, you used great description and it sounds like its an excciting book! Keep blogging!
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