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Damien and Antony moved to the country with their dad, who was trying to start a new life because they had recently lost a member of their family to an illness. This situation made the youngest brother Damien turn to his faith more. Damien believed that his mother was a saint, he thought about his mother a lot.
One morning when Damien walked where he had walked a hundred times before, BOOM, a sports bag crashed to the ground smashing his den. As he went to go to investigate he saw a £20 note flying in the wind towards him.
Alison, I love your use of alliteration here.
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1. Try opening your scenes with description, this helps to set the scene when you are writing creativly.
You've described the scene very vividly and made me intrigued to read this book. A line about why you like it so much would have been good.
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