Holes Stanley was marching down the road with no swag. Suddenly a pair of shoes fell from the sky and hit him on the head.
“OWCH” screamed Stanley as he stumbles to his feet. He picked up the shoes and put them on his feet. Now Stanley has so much swag and he looks sick! Suddenly out of nowhere, he heard the police sirens so he decided to run. The shoe laces came undone and he fell to the groupd with a thump.
“OWCH” screamed Stanley as he stumbles to his feet. He picked up the shoes and put them on his feet. Now Stanley has so much swag and he looks sick! Suddenly out of nowhere, he heard the police sirens so he decided to run. The shoe laces came undone and he fell to the groupd with a thump.
The police circled round him.
Josh, you have used some great verbs in your writing like "marched" - well done.
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1. Ensure you don't spouse slang in your writing as it will decrease your grade.
To Josh
ReplyDeleteA great piece of writing about your favourite scene from the book "Holes". You have chosen relevant words to convey your thoughts. I am wondering why Stanley decided to run when he heard the police sirens.
Keep up the great writing.
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