Bob woke at 7 AM on a cold Sunday morning. He walked downstairs, walked over to
the fridge, and got the milk out. He then got a bowl out of his cupboard. He was
about to get the cornflakes out of his cabinet when suddenly, out of the blue a
rat scurried across the floor!
“ARRGH!” screamed Bob.
Bob reached for the cereal
bowl and threw it at the rat. It hit it right in the head, and decapitated it,
leaving the body scurrying around on its own. The rat slowly stopped moving, and
Bob made a sigh of relief.
What a horrid thought! Good use of paragraphing with dialogue.
ReplyDeleteTarget for next time - try using some figurative language like a simile or metaphor for effect.