I was alone on the beach in Hawaii. It was beautifuI. I took my surf board and
went surfing, the water was ice cold at first but I got used to it. I was
surfing when out of the blue my surf board disappeared. Suddenly a massive wave
came and took me under the deep blue water. I couldn’t breathe, I was scared.
I
woke up on a mysterious beach, completely different to the one I was on before.
It was lonely and silent you couldn’t even hear a thing. It looked like a
deserted island. Where was I….
A haunting ending Rina. You have used some good vocabulary.
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a really good ending rina, keep up the good work. your good old friend georgia ellis
ReplyDeleteuse your puncuation alot more but a really good poem you could be more detailed though
ReplyDeletethats so good rina well done
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