Friday, 8 February 2013

100 Word Challenge - Out of the Blue - Georgia

Here I am once again sitting at the beach on a family trip out. I don’t know why we have these family trips they are so boring.

“Come on George, come surfing with us” shouted dad from the sea.

I stood up and headed to the sea. My dad just surfed a wave which was cool but I was going to show him how it’s done. I grabbed my surf board and… then all off a sudden a massive wave came crashing towards me. I fell over. Out of the blue my dead grandma said “how are you my princess”.
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2 comments:

  1. Sarah Findlater13 February 2013 at 15:22

    Good attempt at use of short sentences for effect.

    Target for future - try using some figurative language like a simile or a metaphor

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  2. Anonymous14 February 2013 at 15:24

    well done this is so good

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